Do you like my story?

From what you have posted so far, your story seems to be an ordeal of witnessing of a 'live' child bear process. Well, you must be very young because your story doesn't say anything medical or adult terms. For the start, I did give you a C for grammar, C for story plot, B for trying hard and an A for the guts to publish it for people to comment! Keep it up, you might be a writer in the making!